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Showing, Not Telling (writing tip #2)
Zielle S.

Hi everyone! :) <br> <br> Do you know how teachers and other writers always say, 'show, not tell'? Describing is a good way to make your story more interesting. :) For example: if you're describing the way a girl looks, instead of saying: 'The girl had blue eyes, pale skin, and curly blond hair. She smiled.', maybe you could substitute it with something like this: <br> <br> 'The girls' shimmering sea blue eyes darted through the crowd, her pale skin matching the golden locks bouncing on her shoulders. A smile tugging at the corners of her lips revealed a line of perfect teeth.' <br> <br> Or something like that. ;) <br> <br> Lots of people could have blue eyes, curly blond hair and pale skin. I would try to make her stand out. If someone were looking for her in a group of people with blue eyes, pale skin and curly blond hair, how would that someone find her? What would stand out about her? <br> <br> And for example, a boy is walking down the street and he's angry at himself, and sad. I could describe him as a boy with his hands in his pockets muttering to himself and kicking a stone. Or a boy mumbling and punching the air with clenched fists. <br> <br> Well, I hope that helped!!! :) <br> <br> Happy writing! (BTW, if you see that I'm not applying my tip into my stories, please let me know so I can work on it! :) ) < br > < br > Zielle < br > < br > ~ Smile! God loves you. ~
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